Act 1:
A burglar sneaks through an overcrowded metropolis. The burglar is wearing a stereotypical striped outfit with a large 'Swag' Bag draped over his shoulder. The Police search around for the man in question. The Burglar is merely passing through the back alleys until he spies a low wall with no security. He throws his swag bag over the wall first to cushion his fall. He vaults over the wall and picks up his swag bad. He sees a door that is ajar. He slips through into the dark store.
Act 2:
The cash register sits in the distant with a stream of moonlight over it. A heavenly choir plays as Burglar gets a distinct feeling of money (Dollar Bill signs like a slot machine roll through his eyes). He creeps (exaggerate) across the shop floor until... his foot slowly deflates a rubber chicken which sets of a chain of events. The deflated chicken lets a piece of string go slack, allowing a fake bowling ball to fall against the wall, tugging on the security alarm. Distressed, Burglar turns to flee but a boxing glove on a spring fly's out of a wall hitting the burglar in the face. As he stumbles and tries to regain his footing, his hands land on some fly paper that is on display. With the fly paper stuck, he randomly flails his arms around to remove the paper but instead gets itching powder packets attached to his hands. He lifts his arms up unaware and sprinkles the powder over his back. Whilst trying to scratch his itch, he falls over and lands a centimeter away from some fake poo. Disgusted, Burglar leaps up but forgets about the fly paper which swings him into a stack of costumes. He emerges with a fake moustache and glasses combo attached to his face and is unaware of it. Burglar tries to force himself to the desk while stink bombs explode all around him being dropped from the ceiling.
Act 3:
Burglar continues to push forward as the obstacles all start to take its toll on him. He closes in on the cash register only to be greeted by a wall of fly paper strapped to toy crossbows. As he urges forward, the crossbows peel themselves back ready to fire. He reaches for the register and is an inch away.
Then the crossbows fire. The array of flypaper fill the screen.
Police pull up outside the shop and ready there weapons and aim then at the shop. The door then opens with Burglar, battered and bruised and mummified in fly paper.
The Police men yell "Get on the..." as Burglar topples over. "Um, yeah! You stay there!".
The camera zooms in on Burglar as he gives a sigh of defeat.
A burglar sneaks through an overcrowded metropolis. The burglar is wearing a stereotypical striped outfit with a large 'Swag' Bag draped over his shoulder. The Police search around for the man in question. The Burglar is merely passing through the back alleys until he spies a low wall with no security. He throws his swag bag over the wall first to cushion his fall. He vaults over the wall and picks up his swag bad. He sees a door that is ajar. He slips through into the dark store.
Act 2:
The cash register sits in the distant with a stream of moonlight over it. A heavenly choir plays as Burglar gets a distinct feeling of money (Dollar Bill signs like a slot machine roll through his eyes). He creeps (exaggerate) across the shop floor until... his foot slowly deflates a rubber chicken which sets of a chain of events. The deflated chicken lets a piece of string go slack, allowing a fake bowling ball to fall against the wall, tugging on the security alarm. Distressed, Burglar turns to flee but a boxing glove on a spring fly's out of a wall hitting the burglar in the face. As he stumbles and tries to regain his footing, his hands land on some fly paper that is on display. With the fly paper stuck, he randomly flails his arms around to remove the paper but instead gets itching powder packets attached to his hands. He lifts his arms up unaware and sprinkles the powder over his back. Whilst trying to scratch his itch, he falls over and lands a centimeter away from some fake poo. Disgusted, Burglar leaps up but forgets about the fly paper which swings him into a stack of costumes. He emerges with a fake moustache and glasses combo attached to his face and is unaware of it. Burglar tries to force himself to the desk while stink bombs explode all around him being dropped from the ceiling.
Act 3:
Burglar continues to push forward as the obstacles all start to take its toll on him. He closes in on the cash register only to be greeted by a wall of fly paper strapped to toy crossbows. As he urges forward, the crossbows peel themselves back ready to fire. He reaches for the register and is an inch away.
Then the crossbows fire. The array of flypaper fill the screen.
Police pull up outside the shop and ready there weapons and aim then at the shop. The door then opens with Burglar, battered and bruised and mummified in fly paper.
The Police men yell "Get on the..." as Burglar topples over. "Um, yeah! You stay there!".
The camera zooms in on Burglar as he gives a sigh of defeat.
I took out the entire prison scene from the story and ended on when the police catch him.
P.S You can proberly see the change in the blog? The website that hosted my former template has died so it gave a black screen. So I changed it this and tried some others but they looked 'corporate'. So I settled on this.
2 comments:
Your blog looks good - and your story is much more lean... good x 2!
Thanks Phil. I'm cracking away on the checklist of work. Next on the agenda: Essay. I think the deal with the story is that sometimes less is more.
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